This blog is about haiku. A classical haiku counts 5-7-5 syllables. Chèvrefeuille (the pseudonym of Kristjaan Panneman, a Dutch haiku poet) however writes his haiku in the Kanshicho-style. In the Kanshicho-style the classical syllable count isn't used. Matsuo Basho (1644-1694), a haiku poet, wrote his haiku in Kanshicho-style for several years, but he returned to the classical way of haiku writing. !!! Anonymous comments will be seen as SPAM !!!.
Firstly, I apologise for the English! It is rare to find a modern haiku with that elegance of twist in the last line, but you have hit it perfectly. I first read a haiku as a teenager, and they struck me deeply. It has been years since a haiku has done that - until today. Thank you for rekindling that emotion in me, with a skillful, succinct gem of a haiku!
Wow what a nice comments you all give me. This haiku is very in balance, but I had first no idea how to use the prompt "birdie" with a twist. After reading your comments I can only smile.
Firstly, I apologise for the English!
ReplyDeleteIt is rare to find a modern haiku with that elegance of twist in the last line, but you have hit it perfectly.
I first read a haiku as a teenager, and they struck me deeply. It has been years since a haiku has done that - until today. Thank you for rekindling that emotion in me, with a skillful, succinct gem of a haiku!
Thank you Zoe. I am already more than 25 yrs busy with haiku. I love haiku, it's my life. I hope you will again be amazed with haiku.
ReplyDeleteLoved that last line. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteA very excited child and not at all under par!! :) Nice twisty haiku!!
ReplyDeleteI love this...the combination of two different meanings of "birdie" Haiku is an art..I love writing them...bot sure I give the poetic form justice
ReplyDeleteBeautiful photo and nice use of the prompt.
ReplyDeleteMelanie
Wow what a nice comments you all give me. This haiku is very in balance, but I had first no idea how to use the prompt "birdie" with a twist.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your comments I can only smile.