Friday, September 28, 2012

September Heights, day 29 battlefield

Inspired by the theme at


Almost over ... counting down the last days of September Heights. Today we have battlefield for prompt. September Heights was a battlefield. Every day we had to write a haiku on a given theme. Sometimes it wasn't easy and sometimes it was. I have read wonderful haiku and (as I read the comments on my haiku) I think I have written nice haiku. There were difficult prompts for me, because  English isn't my maiden language. I tried to write haiku on every given prompt. OK back to the prompt of today.

Source: Samurai

When I read this prompt a haiku written by Basho came in mind. Basho wrote it at an ancient battlefield which he encountered during his 'Narrow Road to the Far North -- Oku no Hosomichi', one of his journeys. This battlefield at Takadachi was now just covered with grass. He wrote the next haiku when he encountered it and cried afterwards.

waving long grass
all that remains of ancient warriors
trace of dreams

(This is a translation of the original by myself: the original haiku in romaji is: natsukusa ya / tsuwamono domo ga / yume no ato)

If you have time ... please read Basho's Narrow Road to the Far North, it's a wonderful haibun. I have read it several times and enjoyed it very much. Every time I read this haibun I encounter new things, new deeper meaning. Really it's worth reading.


Let's go and do some haiku writing on 'battlefield'.

a bridge to far
allies taking the wrong way
peace in reach


unknown soldier
slaughtered on the battlefield
no more dreaming



The Unknown Soldier - Moscow
 
my battlefield
writing haiku every day again
can't find the words


can't find the words
writing in a foreign language
my battlefield


Hm ... quite good I think. Love the differences in these haiku. Enjoy the read.

By the way: October 1st I will kick-off a new daily haiku meme Carpe Diem, seize the day. Be welcome to share your haiku with us.

21 comments:

Barbara said...

Your poems are so thoughtful and deeply felt! I especially loved the second one. Heartbreaking!

awalkinmyheart said...

I like the idea of being in a battlefield when we are writing our haiku! So this whole month of September Heights we have been on the battlefield! I think we will all come out of it as glorious soldiers!

Ellecee said...

You've written a very interesting series of haiku on the "battlefield" prompt. All well done. My favourite is the "unknown soldier" one :-)

kaykuala said...

The unsung heroes are the ones who ought to be honored but left on the wayside. Nice thoughts Kris!

Hank

Judith Westerfield said...

I do think you've left the battlefield unscathed with a medal of distinction!

knot2share said...

Everybody is a true winner, including you Kristjaan san! Two more days to go before the Sept battle ends. Cheers to your effort as they have been worthy of all praise.

Green Speck said...

A lovely haiku set ... loved each one of them !!!

Hazel said...

I find the second one very sad but I like it.

kaykuala said...

We don't fight in all the battlefields you have here. But we accept it as a challenge to whet our desire to succeed. Nicely Kris!


Hank

Kristjaan Panneman said...

Thx for all your awesome comments. My faborite is the one about the unknown soldier. How many unknown soldiers died for peace?

Tigerbrite said...

Wow. Lots of talent here. Well done, especially for writing in a foreign language.

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

I'm right there with you on the daily writing battlefield!

Battlefield

odyzz said...

salute to those unknown soldiers..awesome take ...and yes for the sept battle all of us have tried well to put our best foot forward...cheers

Karin Wiberg said...

Nice job. I liked the unknown soldier especially, but thank you also for sharing more background. Very interesting.

Susan Daniels said...

These are so well done.

Kathy Donlan said...

I love how the first set harkens back to Basho's poem. The second is wonderful, of course.

heavenhappens said...

September haiku has certainly been a challenge for me, but I have really enkoyed reading the other posts.

Teresa said...

I am truly amazed that you write such beautiful poetry in a language that is not easy even for native speakers. Your second haiku for battlefield is very powerful.

Kristjaan Panneman said...

Thank you all for being together on this September Heights journey.

Kristjaan Panneman said...

Awesome words you all sprinkle on me.

Kaa.Na.Kalyanasundaram said...

All of your haiku poems are very fine and deep. My regards.

Kaa.Na.Kalyanasundaram