Monday, September 7, 2015

Ah! That summer rain. (A choka)

Red Honeysuckle

Ah! That summer rain, a choka

Dear friends,

I recently challenged the members of my daily haiku meme Carpe Diem Haiku Kai to write a choka, a Japanese long poem. Of course I have given it a try myself. To start this first time choka ever I have used a haiku, which I composed using baransu.

the cooing of pigeons
resonates through the gray streets –
ah! that summer rain
refreshes the dried out earth
filling its scars
the perfume of earth tickles
my nostrils
after the hot summer days
I dance in the rain
naked on the top of the hills
I feel free at last
nature around me comes to life
field flowers bloom
I see their beautiful colors
the perfume of Honeysuckle

ah! that summer rain
the perfume of the moist soil
tickles my senses
I lay down, naked in her arms
surrounded by Honeysuckle

© Chèvrefeuille

I wasn’t easy to compose this choka. I had never done this before, and I don’t know if I succeeded, but I like this choka a lot. Maybe, I have to try choka more often … or will this be my only, once in a life time, choka?

See you, have a nice week.

4 comments:

blogitorloseit.com said...

Love the choka, Chevrefeuille ---- !!!

Eleaine Sarah Thomas Jobs Bush said...

choka,

amazing poetry form

;)

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humbird said...

I like it very much, Kristjaan; don't know this form, so interesting to read and learn...