Tuesday, November 8, 2011

Little Birdie!!

For One Single Impression a new haiku on the prompt "Birdie":

"Little Birdie, Little Birdie!"
The little child's screams
On the golf course


Zoe said...

Firstly, I apologise for the English!
It is rare to find a modern haiku with that elegance of twist in the last line, but you have hit it perfectly.
I first read a haiku as a teenager, and they struck me deeply. It has been years since a haiku has done that - until today. Thank you for rekindling that emotion in me, with a skillful, succinct gem of a haiku!

Chèvrefeuille said...

Thank you Zoe. I am already more than 25 yrs busy with haiku. I love haiku, it's my life. I hope you will again be amazed with haiku.

anthonynorth said...

Loved that last line. Excellent.

Nanka said...

A very excited child and not at all under par!! :) Nice twisty haiku!!

Susie Clevenger said...

I love this...the combination of two different meanings of "birdie" Haiku is an art..I love writing them...bot sure I give the poetic form justice

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Beautiful photo and nice use of the prompt.


Chèvrefeuille said...

Wow what a nice comments you all give me. This haiku is very in balance, but I had first no idea how to use the prompt "birdie" with a twist.
After reading your comments I can only smile.