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What do I see? I see a guy standing for a picture of a woman's face ... her eyes staring at him. What does this picture ... bring to me ... how to write a haiku that can accompany this picture.
mysterious eyes
working like a magnet
I am possessed
I am possessed
through the eyes of my girl
nailed to the ground
nailed to the ground
I wonder what she's doing with her
mysterious eyes
This is called a cascading haiku. It's a haiku form I am exploring.
See you next time.
22 comments:
Excellent take on the prompt. I must explore your blogs further.
Awesome...
JJRod'z
I am not a writer or a poet or whatever. My blog is just a way to get me out of tension. A form of outlet. Thanks for your wonderful comment and visit to my blog this morning... Made my day...
And your lovely words flow like a waterfall.....
:)
Wow Very Nice
Wonderful take. I am glad I found you!
obscured
You can feel the power of the possession all right! The form seems to work well.
I use syllable count in my own work. I like this use of the form.
hehe i know what they are doing to me, but i wonder what her eyes are doing to her...ha...nicely done...
Oh, I like the cascading haiku! I had not been aware of this form until now.
I have never heard of this kind of haiku
does this not diminish moment?
but as a poem...I liked how it tumbled stanza to stanza
I will indeed check this form out
lovely take on this prompt
I think the repetition here works well; I like the cascade effect. Cheers.
I like the "cascading haiku" - I haven't seen that before! It definitely brings an extra amount of "flow" to your words.
Nice work! I wonder what she is doing with her eyes as well. :)
Well done!
A cascading haiku, how nice, Chevre! I dabble in haiku at odd times. Should try it myself. It gives good continuation. Great!
Hank
Thank you for this!
Wander
http://wanderwithoutbeinglost.blogspot.com
Excellent!
Anna :o]
they r mysterious indeed !!
loved the flow of cascading haiku :)
Yep, Mona Lisa's smile's got nothin' on this woman's eyes...
;)
I like the segues that connect these three...nice...
Very nice ... and I like you using the cascading Haiku ... so many of our Haiku challengers have "taken a liking" to this form and continue with it ... Great job!
Thank you all for the wonderful and lovely words you shared with me as comments on this blog item. I am glad that there are so many visitors who will share there thoughts about this.
I am grateful for all those kind words.
Namaste
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