Saturday, February 11, 2012

The Haiku Challenge, day 12





Written for The Haiku Challenge 2012 - Day 12 – February 12th – Theme or Word: Colors Form: Naisaiku


I am not so familiar with the Naisaiku so I had to read the way to do at the Naisaiku-blog. First I thought "this isn't my kind of poetry", but when I read the way to write Naisaiku again I thought "this is fun and so close to me".
The Naisaiku uses the real classical haiku in which it was possible to switch the lines e.g. a good haiku (a classical one of course) has three lines, the first and third sentence can be exchanged. I will give an example.



This one was the first haiku I ever wrote in English:

a lonely flower
my companion
for one night


This is written in the classical Kanshicho-style and when I exchange the first and third line the haiku becomes:

for one night
my companion
a lonely flower


Unless the exchange of the both lines this haiku remains the same. As I understand ... in a Naisaiku this is what I have to do: choose a haiku which is reversible and make it a new form. Well I have tried it with the one I gave above.


a lonely flower
my companion
for one night
A LONELY FLOWER
for one night
my companion
a lonely flower


Doing this is fun! I love this artificial poetry. Maybe I will write a few Naisaiku on the theme colors.



colorful bouquet
a joy to look at today
memorial day
colorful bouquet
memorial day
a joy to look at today
colorful bouquet

  





This is really fun, so I have to write another one :-)




modern art
fantastic colors
amazing
modern art
amazing
fantastic colors
modern art



Credits: Modern Art

See you again tomorrow.


12 comments:

Asni said...

I love the image you painted with the words. Awesome!

Mama Zen said...

Oh, I get it now! Thanks for explaining the form.

Lolamouse said...

Wonderful poems! I think I love your first one the best! It's really beautiful!

Suzy said...

Just lovely - I've never heard of this but it sure sounds like fun. thanks so much for visiting my blog.

Grace said...

I think you did a better job with this form than I. Very nice pictures too ~

Vidya Sury said...

Lovely haikus. What a fun idea to switch the lines! :-)

☂☆ Vållῐ ★♬ said...

Lovely haiku...And thanks for explanation...It helped me to write one....

Ramesh Sood said...

Very well done..this.. I also had to borrow from one of my earlier haiku..I borrowed two lines and created a painting out of them with them... you have explained it so well..

RS :)

SweetTalkingGuy said...

You're bang on with your description! Lovely work, and a joy to read! Such fun!!!

Amber said...

I liked them all! And it was fun reading them! :)
Thanks for explaining the form so well! :)

becca givens said...

You tackle each day's prompt with such vigor and delight!! Another successful day in the life of Haiku Challenge -- we are nearly half way through!! Bravo!!

Thank you for being so faithful for visiting!! Happy week to you!

Someone is Special said...

Lovely set of Naisaiku.. Loved it so much..