Written for The Haiku Challenge 2012 - Day 12 – February 12th – Theme or Word: Colors Form: Naisaiku
I am not so familiar with the Naisaiku so I had to read the way to do at the Naisaiku-blog. First I thought "this isn't my kind of poetry", but when I read the way to write Naisaiku again I thought "this is fun and so close to me".
The Naisaiku uses the real classical haiku in which it was possible to switch the lines e.g. a good haiku (a classical one of course) has three lines, the first and third sentence can be exchanged. I will give an example.
This one was the first haiku I ever wrote in English:
a lonely flower
my companion
for one night
This is written in the classical Kanshicho-style and when I exchange the first and third line the haiku becomes:
for one night
my companion
a lonely flower
Unless the exchange of the both lines this haiku remains the same. As I understand ... in a Naisaiku this is what I have to do: choose a haiku which is reversible and make it a new form. Well I have tried it with the one I gave above.
my companion
a lonely flower
Unless the exchange of the both lines this haiku remains the same. As I understand ... in a Naisaiku this is what I have to do: choose a haiku which is reversible and make it a new form. Well I have tried it with the one I gave above.
a lonely flower
my companion
for one night
A LONELY FLOWER
for one night
my companion
a lonely flower
Doing this is fun! I love this artificial poetry. Maybe I will write a few Naisaiku on the theme colors.
colorful bouquet
a joy to look at today
memorial day
colorful bouquet
memorial day
a joy to look at today
colorful bouquet
This is really fun, so I have to write another one :-)
modern art
fantastic colors
amazing
modern art
amazing
fantastic colors
modern art
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| Credits: Modern Art |
See you again tomorrow.
12 comments:
I love the image you painted with the words. Awesome!
Oh, I get it now! Thanks for explaining the form.
Wonderful poems! I think I love your first one the best! It's really beautiful!
Just lovely - I've never heard of this but it sure sounds like fun. thanks so much for visiting my blog.
I think you did a better job with this form than I. Very nice pictures too ~
Lovely haikus. What a fun idea to switch the lines! :-)
Lovely haiku...And thanks for explanation...It helped me to write one....
Very well done..this.. I also had to borrow from one of my earlier haiku..I borrowed two lines and created a painting out of them with them... you have explained it so well..
RS :)
You're bang on with your description! Lovely work, and a joy to read! Such fun!!!
I liked them all! And it was fun reading them! :)
Thanks for explaining the form so well! :)
You tackle each day's prompt with such vigor and delight!! Another successful day in the life of Haiku Challenge -- we are nearly half way through!! Bravo!!
Thank you for being so faithful for visiting!! Happy week to you!
Lovely set of Naisaiku.. Loved it so much..
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